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Paw patrol pumpkin transformation
Please give me any tips
Category Story / Transformation
Species Dog (Other)
Gender Male
Size 50 x 50px
Your story is great but is full done with your story or part of it
Ok is fine that and you like my ideas of transformation story of rocky and marshall transformation you like
Do mom transform into Marshall in her son bday party in McDonald's
Etc
Etc
Hey ruthkowski1 you do you make dad transform into Marshall or female version of marshall and which ones you choose
What if I turn into female version of marshall what you do and how you make me transform into female version of marshall
Hey ruthkowski1 you are ok and what happened to you note me and what you doing
Interesting concept you have there. Now, you do ask for tips, so here are my tips:
Watch your grammar. I know this is hard …lol. I struggle with it as well. While A story doesn’t have to be perfect for me to read it- the smoothness of the reading was affected a bit. Some tips- each characters name should be capitalized. Watch your word choice: they’re is they are ( as in they are hungry), there is referring to a location ( the pumpkins came from over there). Some of your contracted words- you are using the wrong word.
As for the story- it was an interesting concept. It was short. Perhaps if you add in some descriptions of how things look, feel, smell, sound it can help beef up the story a bit and help set the scene.
Now, there is no other way to improve with writing than to write more. I do hope you continue! Nice work
Watch your grammar. I know this is hard …lol. I struggle with it as well. While A story doesn’t have to be perfect for me to read it- the smoothness of the reading was affected a bit. Some tips- each characters name should be capitalized. Watch your word choice: they’re is they are ( as in they are hungry), there is referring to a location ( the pumpkins came from over there). Some of your contracted words- you are using the wrong word.
As for the story- it was an interesting concept. It was short. Perhaps if you add in some descriptions of how things look, feel, smell, sound it can help beef up the story a bit and help set the scene.
Now, there is no other way to improve with writing than to write more. I do hope you continue! Nice work
You want hear my paw patrol Marshall and rocky and zuma etc transformation ideas for you make it and i hope you use my ideas like might pup transformation which one you use might pup and female version of marshall or rocky or zuma and maybe might twin transformation and etc and you like it ruthkowski1
You make transformation story of might pup which might pup or female version of might pup you use and Transformation story of soda version of marshall and rocky and zuma and chase and Transformation story of female version of marshall or rocky or zuma in dad son bday party in McDonald's you like it ruthkowski1 and which one of my ideas you start making transformation story please note me
Hey ruthkowski1 if you done with paw patrol pumpkin transformation when you get computer in Christmas and if you add me in your paw patrol transformation story and I turn into Marshall I just ask
You okay because you not note me back or something you okay
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