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Thank you for taking your time to visit my page. An aspiring writer/some guy with a hobby.
I live in Canada, Toronto, everything else is classified.
PS: sometimes will review a movie or talk about heavy topic (Sorry) in journals.
Forgotten Warriors Series: https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery.....otten-Warriors
Follow the adventures of Chester, a young orphan from a small town who, one day, met an ancient warrior spirit. Now, granted powers, he has to form a team and save his town from the monsters of evil Lord Vaco, all the while learning more about the past he was never given. Inspired by old Tokusatsu series like Power Rangers and Digimon. Create as I go along, which is why it has Revised version. (https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery.....arriors-Revise)
Remember, Remember (Those Poor Unfortunate Souls): https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery.....e-Souls-Series
Norman is a normal monkey. Archie is a "being" created by Artemis. Artemis doesn't want me to know what he is doing. Follow the characters in their everyday life, all the while trying to find a way to make sure the world doesn't end. Includes snippets of DeVita and Schwartz, a "Knife and Fork" duo who originate from the "Garbage Area", a world where everything and anything exists, no matter how outrageous, as they try to make their living as scavengers. Experimental series.
Survive: https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery.....Survive-Series
Laura is a human who ended up in the world of animals. Or at least, they supposedly are. Everyone thinks they are "human", and while she is in a familiar place, everyone and everything is different. Furthermore, it seems that someone had orchestrated her her current predicament, leaving her with more questions. Meeting Dex, an VERY odd detective with personal sense of flare, she has to survive a world full of crazy animals, impossible murder cases, and dark secrets. Insanity galore awaits! Personal project since middle school, still working on it.
Summer Leaves: https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery...../Summer-Leaves
Natsu was raised in a perfect family, by perfect parents, with perfect older brother. But unfortunately, he himself isn't perfect, and is in fact, a mess. Not wanting to disappoint his parents, his brother sent him to work for a quirky friend of his, in a town full of wacky, unpredictable, somewhat insane, yet charming people he'll come to love. A comedic series about learning adulthood. Another series that came since High School, and will also be short. Still working on it.
Thank you for taking your time to visit my page. An aspiring writer/some guy with a hobby.
I live in Canada, Toronto, everything else is classified.
PS: sometimes will review a movie or talk about heavy topic (Sorry) in journals.
Forgotten Warriors Series: https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery.....otten-Warriors
Follow the adventures of Chester, a young orphan from a small town who, one day, met an ancient warrior spirit. Now, granted powers, he has to form a team and save his town from the monsters of evil Lord Vaco, all the while learning more about the past he was never given. Inspired by old Tokusatsu series like Power Rangers and Digimon. Create as I go along, which is why it has Revised version. (https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery.....arriors-Revise)
Remember, Remember (Those Poor Unfortunate Souls): https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery.....e-Souls-Series
Norman is a normal monkey. Archie is a "being" created by Artemis. Artemis doesn't want me to know what he is doing. Follow the characters in their everyday life, all the while trying to find a way to make sure the world doesn't end. Includes snippets of DeVita and Schwartz, a "Knife and Fork" duo who originate from the "Garbage Area", a world where everything and anything exists, no matter how outrageous, as they try to make their living as scavengers. Experimental series.
Survive: https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery.....Survive-Series
Laura is a human who ended up in the world of animals. Or at least, they supposedly are. Everyone thinks they are "human", and while she is in a familiar place, everyone and everything is different. Furthermore, it seems that someone had orchestrated her her current predicament, leaving her with more questions. Meeting Dex, an VERY odd detective with personal sense of flare, she has to survive a world full of crazy animals, impossible murder cases, and dark secrets. Insanity galore awaits! Personal project since middle school, still working on it.
Summer Leaves: https://www.furaffinity.net/gallery...../Summer-Leaves
Natsu was raised in a perfect family, by perfect parents, with perfect older brother. But unfortunately, he himself isn't perfect, and is in fact, a mess. Not wanting to disappoint his parents, his brother sent him to work for a quirky friend of his, in a town full of wacky, unpredictable, somewhat insane, yet charming people he'll come to love. A comedic series about learning adulthood. Another series that came since High School, and will also be short. Still working on it.
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Mufasa The Lion King - Neat addition. Don't need it
3 months ago
Just saw the prequel of the remake (created since Disney likes money, which they are desperate for some these days), because I am a long time Lion King fan.
And to put long story short, take it or leave it.
The story is straightforward, being a prequel posited as a story told to Kiara (once again, canonizing her for the movies), while she waits for her parents to come back with Kion (yep, he is canonized fully too.)
I have some thoughts. On the one hand, I do like some of the ideas they put out, including making Scar a nice little lion before becoming evil (Seems to be getting more popular these days, like Transformers One. By the way, watch that movie, it is CRIMINAL it could not gain enough of box office.) Some of the beat the had were also pretty great. I don't mind that they are not related, because it allows to forego the whole problem with Kovu AND helps to establish why Scar felt demeaned without making Mufasa clueless.
On the other, this is EXTREMELY contradictory to the original (Scar's "end of the gene pool" speech made it clear that both were related by blood, and Zazu knew Mufasa since his birth, meaning he couldn't have been Sarabi's majordomo), they clearly needed one more rewrite, as well as more straighter direction, because they clearly chose to write it as a prequel to the original animated move and not the 2019 remake. You could tell, because most of the changes they were going for in there. And yet, there are many writing bits and pieces that should've been either done away with, redone, or thrown away.
So, here's my personal additions to the story. SPOILERS AHEAD
- Have Mufasa actually be a prince. I don't care that Disney wants to have no "Royal Bloodlines", keep him blue-blooded. It makes a lot more sense with the rest of the lore anyways.
- Have him get into trouble because he was trying to show off for his king father, and not because he randomly got into a flood and separated from them. Do the whole thing where he was trying to make himself greater, only to get humbled and that's what keeps him from trying harder from the most of the movie. He doesn't want to screw up again.
- Make Taka actually crafty. For one, the reason he is named Taka is because he was the only cub who survived the outsiders because of his craftiness, despite how much his own father saw him as the runt compared to other cubs. Note, he never had other siblings, he was just one in line.
- Meanwhile, despite his craftiness, make him a good manipulator too, AND have tendency to choose path of least resistance. Have the story take the side that he knows how to get out of trouble, but he was never good at head on confrontation. That's why he feels so bad around Mufasa after a while, sure the latter puts himself down, but he does things Taka would never dreamed to be able to do.
- Have the scene of him trying to talk Sarabi into joining them and then flirt with Sarabi by trying to be sincere, but failing to make it work. He is a crafty lion, but when he has to confront people, he fails spectacularly. Make this the reason he couldn't help but reveal to her that Mufasa likes her.
Also, make it clear that he feels betrayed by Mufasa being something more than he could ever be, which is why he is so upset when they get together.
- In the end, when he "betrays" the gang, reveal mid-fight that he actually set it up so that he planned on stabbing Kiros in the back, and that, while Mufasa is the brute force, Taka was always the brains.
- However, his attempt ended up in a failure, and he was given a choice to die by Kiros's claw trying to save Mufasa, or run away as fast as he can, while Kiros takes care of his brother. Taka takes a step back and watches Mufasa fight for his life only to be held down. As he takes his final swing, Taka jumps and takes the blow across the face, but that knocks him out and sends him flying into the chasm abyss. Mufasa charges at Kiros and takes both of them into the watery below.
- After managing to defeat Kiros, Mufasa is saved by Taka, but the latter acts a bit different, saying he has a bit of a bump in his head "I feel like I did something I never thought I'd do. I'm like a whole new lion!"
- Mufasa is mentioning about the betrayal, but Taka says, "I understand, but I have saved our lives again, didn't I?"
Mufasa eyes him. "You put us in danger in the first place!"
"And if it weren't for me, he still would've been after us." He notices Mufasa's eyes look down, and then Sarabi starts to come closer. Avoiding meeting her gaze, he tells Mufasa, "You have proven yourself far more than I ever did. I am sorry...brother."
Mufasa looks at him again.
"I am no king. I could never be the king they wanted from me. Unlike you."
"I am not a king."
"You have everything. Things I never even dreamed of. And you would throw it away now?" Taka stares directly in his eyes, "Don't fool either of us, Mufasa. Stop stalling and make yourself king. I'll wait my turn." He turns to go.
"Taka!" Mufasa shouts, stopping him. "I owe many things to you. Which is why I want you to stay by my side. Let us rule together, as brothers."
Taka slowly shows the side of his face. "I'd rather not share the spotlight. Not quite my thing. Also, don't call me Taka anymore, I despised that name." He chuckled. "You can, however, call me Scar. Sounds quite impressive, don't you think?"
...And those are my ideas. I understand that it is still contradictory (to both movies, again, since the remake basically lifted all the same dialogue script, so same ideas apply here), but if this was what they were going for, that's what I would add. In any case, this movie isn't the worst, but also could've been better.
And to put long story short, take it or leave it.
The story is straightforward, being a prequel posited as a story told to Kiara (once again, canonizing her for the movies), while she waits for her parents to come back with Kion (yep, he is canonized fully too.)
I have some thoughts. On the one hand, I do like some of the ideas they put out, including making Scar a nice little lion before becoming evil (Seems to be getting more popular these days, like Transformers One. By the way, watch that movie, it is CRIMINAL it could not gain enough of box office.) Some of the beat the had were also pretty great. I don't mind that they are not related, because it allows to forego the whole problem with Kovu AND helps to establish why Scar felt demeaned without making Mufasa clueless.
On the other, this is EXTREMELY contradictory to the original (Scar's "end of the gene pool" speech made it clear that both were related by blood, and Zazu knew Mufasa since his birth, meaning he couldn't have been Sarabi's majordomo), they clearly needed one more rewrite, as well as more straighter direction, because they clearly chose to write it as a prequel to the original animated move and not the 2019 remake. You could tell, because most of the changes they were going for in there. And yet, there are many writing bits and pieces that should've been either done away with, redone, or thrown away.
So, here's my personal additions to the story. SPOILERS AHEAD
- Have Mufasa actually be a prince. I don't care that Disney wants to have no "Royal Bloodlines", keep him blue-blooded. It makes a lot more sense with the rest of the lore anyways.
- Have him get into trouble because he was trying to show off for his king father, and not because he randomly got into a flood and separated from them. Do the whole thing where he was trying to make himself greater, only to get humbled and that's what keeps him from trying harder from the most of the movie. He doesn't want to screw up again.
- Make Taka actually crafty. For one, the reason he is named Taka is because he was the only cub who survived the outsiders because of his craftiness, despite how much his own father saw him as the runt compared to other cubs. Note, he never had other siblings, he was just one in line.
- Meanwhile, despite his craftiness, make him a good manipulator too, AND have tendency to choose path of least resistance. Have the story take the side that he knows how to get out of trouble, but he was never good at head on confrontation. That's why he feels so bad around Mufasa after a while, sure the latter puts himself down, but he does things Taka would never dreamed to be able to do.
- Have the scene of him trying to talk Sarabi into joining them and then flirt with Sarabi by trying to be sincere, but failing to make it work. He is a crafty lion, but when he has to confront people, he fails spectacularly. Make this the reason he couldn't help but reveal to her that Mufasa likes her.
Also, make it clear that he feels betrayed by Mufasa being something more than he could ever be, which is why he is so upset when they get together.
- In the end, when he "betrays" the gang, reveal mid-fight that he actually set it up so that he planned on stabbing Kiros in the back, and that, while Mufasa is the brute force, Taka was always the brains.
- However, his attempt ended up in a failure, and he was given a choice to die by Kiros's claw trying to save Mufasa, or run away as fast as he can, while Kiros takes care of his brother. Taka takes a step back and watches Mufasa fight for his life only to be held down. As he takes his final swing, Taka jumps and takes the blow across the face, but that knocks him out and sends him flying into the chasm abyss. Mufasa charges at Kiros and takes both of them into the watery below.
- After managing to defeat Kiros, Mufasa is saved by Taka, but the latter acts a bit different, saying he has a bit of a bump in his head "I feel like I did something I never thought I'd do. I'm like a whole new lion!"
- Mufasa is mentioning about the betrayal, but Taka says, "I understand, but I have saved our lives again, didn't I?"
Mufasa eyes him. "You put us in danger in the first place!"
"And if it weren't for me, he still would've been after us." He notices Mufasa's eyes look down, and then Sarabi starts to come closer. Avoiding meeting her gaze, he tells Mufasa, "You have proven yourself far more than I ever did. I am sorry...brother."
Mufasa looks at him again.
"I am no king. I could never be the king they wanted from me. Unlike you."
"I am not a king."
"You have everything. Things I never even dreamed of. And you would throw it away now?" Taka stares directly in his eyes, "Don't fool either of us, Mufasa. Stop stalling and make yourself king. I'll wait my turn." He turns to go.
"Taka!" Mufasa shouts, stopping him. "I owe many things to you. Which is why I want you to stay by my side. Let us rule together, as brothers."
Taka slowly shows the side of his face. "I'd rather not share the spotlight. Not quite my thing. Also, don't call me Taka anymore, I despised that name." He chuckled. "You can, however, call me Scar. Sounds quite impressive, don't you think?"
...And those are my ideas. I understand that it is still contradictory (to both movies, again, since the remake basically lifted all the same dialogue script, so same ideas apply here), but if this was what they were going for, that's what I would add. In any case, this movie isn't the worst, but also could've been better.
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